Week 3 Story: When Rama met Sita
Author’s Note:
Rama and his brother came to a royal city (the capital of
King Janaka’s kingdom) and were walking through the streets. They were both in
awe of the business of the walkways and the happy people who inhabited the
town. The women were beautiful and dressed in elaborate clothing, and whole
town was lush and full of excitement. At sunrise, the Rama and his brother went
to bathe in the stream and saw the King’s daughter on the other side. She was the
fairest out of all the other ladies in the city, and Rama immediately fell in
love with her. He finally went up to speak to her, and she invited him to go to
the palace, where he would eventually win her and her father over. In my story,
I am going to add some dialogue between the two and change how they met at the
stream.
Bibliography: “Sita” Ramayana:
Public Domain Edition, Web Source
After a long journey of many days,
Rama and his brother finally arrive at the royal village. In this city, the
busy streets left the man in awe—the men were in awe of the happy people and
lush vegetation around them. The women were beautifully clothed in lavish
garments and the men stood proud in their expensive clothing. Rama and his
younger brother wanted some time to themselves after this long journey, so they
went at sunrise to swim in the stream nearby the village.
Rama dove
into the clear water and began to feel the coolness of the morning wash over
him. Suddenly, he heard light and soft voices coming from the other side of the
river—two women were nearby bathing and soaking their long hair in the water.
“Who are
those two beautiful women?” asked Lakshmi. Rama shook his head but did not
truly listen to his brother.
“The one on
the left is the most gorgeous I have ever seen. Look how her hair shines like
the sun!” replied Rama, still in a trance.
Immediately,
Rama’s brother began encouraging him to go speak to her, but Rama was engulfed
in fear.
“Surely
you, a hero of the kingdom, could be brave enough to speak to a woman as fair
as this one” exclaimed Lakshmi.
Without
warning, Rama found the courage to wade across the stream to the two ladies
while they were getting ready to return to the city. He called out to them, and
the younger of the two spoke back to him.
“We are
returning to the palace, for we are the daughters of King Janarka. I am the
youngest, and this is the oldest, Sita” she pointed to her beautiful sister.
With shy
eyes, Princess Sita looked at Rama, and immediately found him to be handsome
and brave for coming to introduce himself. With a quiet voice she told Rama
that he must return to the palace with them.
“My father
would be quite pleased to see such a noble youth as you in our kingdom” she
said, ever so sweetly.
Rama and
his brother then escorted the two women back to their homes, and along the way,
people were in disbelief that Prince Rama was in their presence. As they
walked, Princess Sita overheard the excitement and asked Rama who he was and
where he came from. All the while, Rama did not reveal that he was a prince or
a hero. He wanted Sita to experience his humility before he asked her father
for her hand.
This painting is an image of Sita with Rama and Lakshmi at the stream talking; this is before they left to walk to the palace
Hi Leigh,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great story. I really like your extensive use of dialogue back and forth between characters. It develops the characters and makes the reader become engaged with the plot. I have only been using about two lines of dialogue in my stories, so it is nice reading your and getting ideas. Keep up the good work!
Hello Leigh,
ReplyDeleteYour story dialogue is really good! As I was reading I felt like I was reading something that could've happened to me or one of my friends. Rama having to build up the courage to go across the river tho speak to the girls, is exactly how things play out today when people are interested in each other. The dialogue that you kept through-out the entire story kept my attention.